PERSONALIZED, PERSONALIZED, PERSONALIZED. Here’s what I mean:
- Skip the “To Whom It May Concern” — Do your damnest to find out who is in charge of the hiring at the company you’re applying to. You have a name, they have a name. I’m serious. Figure it out (call the company, Google them, search for them on LinkedIn.) Make it a mission. Why should the hire you if you don’t know who they are?
- Skip stating that you’re “applying” — they get that. Tell them you’re “interested in their [whatever} position” or that you were researching their company and you noticed they had an opening.
- Don’t re-iterate the job description. They know ALL about it. They put it up.
- Give your Cover Letter a Story-Telling touch — Everyone is going to say they’re the right person for the job. DUH! Talk about why you want the position, your employment journey to this position. What drew you to this opening and how it fits in your overall career goals.
- Carefully place your education and experience — Make your knowledge and skills have an impact by placing them where conversationally, versus, as if you’re stating a fact. Most careers now expect some level of education. Don’t throw it in their face, guide them to your education — and experience and training and whatever else says you’re the sh*t!
I nabbed this one, had to. I post the updated draft I re-wrote tomorrow. Read and share what you would also change to/ about this cover letter.
To Whom It May Concern:
I am applying for the Registered Nurse I/ Relief Nurse position at your hospital. I learned
about this position from a past employee of LA county with whom I work at Saint John’s
Please accept the attached resume as an application for one of the RN new grad
program at your hospital. From the job description, I discovered that you are looking
for individuals who are committed, responsible, good communicators, and caring. I am
confident that I possess the skills required for this position. My desired career goal is to
work with patients, specifically children, as a pediatrics RN. I am currently pursing a
higher nursing degree, bachelor’s of science in nursing to graduate in December 2014.
In addition to my practicum experience throughout nursing school, I also work at St. John’s
Health Care Center in Santa Monica, CA as the Emergency Department secretary and as
a float student nurse assistant throughout all the units in the hospital. I have been lucky
enough to have exceptional registered nurse mentors who have prepared me clinically and
professionally for my first position as a registered nurse following my graduation.
I would appreciate an opportunity to interview for one of the available positions in your
hospital. I have spoken to several past participants from this program who have said that the
orientation program eased their role socialization and allowed them to refine their new skills
and experiences prior to taking on their responsibilities as an independent registered nurse.
I look forward to hearing back from you soon to set up an appointment for an interview with
you and your staff. If you have any questions prior to that time, please do not hesitate to
I feel confident in my abilities to contribute to your staff. Thank you for your time.